Group discussion on TOEFL!

In Mr. Menard's class, we gathered in groups of four and discussed about TOEFL writings written by our classmates. Our topic of  TOEFL writing was to write about the changes that new 21st century will bring. Everyone did good on their writings but I thought Jinuk's essay was the most creative one among them. And here's the result of our group discussion!

Hyunsoo Jeon (Seunghyun's response) http://bloglogfogmog.blogspot.kr/
1. Great examples (Specific & appropriate for the topic)
2. Great organization (Very TOEFL-style, but still, great branching out & great wrap-up)
3. Various changes in various fields (Communication, science & education)

Seungjun Lee (Jaewan's response) http://menboong.blogspot.kr/
1. Gave nice examples (Kyoto Protocol, etc.)
2. Out of the three reasons he used as support, two of them are really strong
3. No grammatical errors.

Jonghyun Wang (Jihun's response) http://jihunkmla.blogspot.kr/
1. Not an overview of the 21^st century, but very focused on one topic (power shift)
2. Might better to use objective POV for examples
3. Good organization

Yong-han Jung (Jinuk's response) http://kmlaenglishwriting.blogspot.kr/
1. Title: WWW (World Wide Web) – also an example of world w/o wires
2. Divide the use of wires into two parts (connect info & charging)
3. Good response to prompt: It’s future technology that we’re looking at
4. Making his own equation for the technology: Creative; Help the readers understand what he’s trying to say.